All 4 u .. (poem)
Hi All .. so delay I know .. sorry ppl ..
now you read my another small poem ..
If you see …
Birds sing in the sky…
On the land …
Tree dancing...
Undersea…
Fish is switching the light…
In this moment ..
You should know …
All 4 u ..
Of course I need your correction .. :D
posted by
@ 7:12 PM
4 Comments:
If this is a poem, so where is the rhyme ?!
Anyways, not bad one.
ok i'm jus like to write ..
so why u dont help to konw where is the rhyme.. i think u have experience ..
Thank you very much Tarek .. 4 your helping .. ^-^
Simple and I liked the images there.
Now waqt el jad :P
It should be birds singing in the sky ..
Also I felt the lines are not connected. But reading it make me feel like you are writing a haiku if you know what that means :D
Hopeless Poet:
ok ..
why i should say singing .. sing is wrong?
haiku .. umm i dnot know whats exactly mean .. but i translated .. Japanese peoms .. right?
you know bro? me too i felt it wasnt connected ..
and this what would to make ..
sky
..
land
..
undersea
..
you got it?
and thank you very much dear .. :D
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